Thwack thwack thwack
Pardon me while I hit my head against the monitor.
I had been having a hard time getting back into writing the Moonstone story. At first, I thought it was because I was thrown off my writing patterns by my vacation at the beach.
Recently, I finally managed to start the next chapter -- the next chapter from Brodin's point of view. This is the one where Brodin leads his fighters into the forest to clean out the remaining bandits. It was a struggle the whole time. And when I really looked at the problem, I realized tbat I hated the chapter. The whole thing was about Brodin leading his warriors (and his kick-derriere niece) into battle against evil bandits. I had a great set-up. And yet I didn't *care*. If the writer doesn't care,neither will the readers. For the most part, the only part I really cared about in Brodin's last three
three chapters was the part where Guy "cozied up to him," trying to give him comfort (oh, that's what they called it back then) after the death of Brodin's brother. Despite the sexual element, it was actually quite sad, and it spoke volumes about Brodin's empty life. So I decided that part was staying, perhaps even moving up. (Moonstone will have fewer chapters now, if I follow my earlier plans, so taking out a whole bandit chapter or two won't be so hard.)
Then I realized I didn't really care about the bandits. I must admit, they were pretty much just there to give Brodin something to do until he met Moonstone. (blush blush) Brodin deserves better -- something that actually relates to the story or to his life
Sigh. So I have to give the poor guy a completely different trouble to face, something I actually care about. Maybe even something that is (gasp) more closely related to the other plot thread. For now, I've decided he should start out by leading his people in a ceremony marking the anniversary of the Battle of Fern Hollow. This will be symbolic because it shows that he is unable to get away from that battle -- he is so stuck in the mourning that he can't truly live.
What happens after that is yet to be discovered. (Translation: I don't know what happens next yet.)